Electricity by Hippie Lou: An Impression + Recommendation

hippie lou, i really enjoyed reading this poem, because several sets of lines resonated with me, including the first few ("you, we / live to create... live to live / a life worth living) and later lines (" i don't need to / be judge / jury / executioner.")

one suggestion i have is to separate your poetry into stanzas / groups of lines, like you did in "hippie lou's bio". After reading about half the poem, the ux became less reader-friendly to me, because my eyes couldn't take a break from seeing one poetry line after another, while reading your words.

you talk about a very real, down-to-earth human experience in that poem, which i really appreciated reading about!

also, it's so refreshing to read poetry, because when i was a college sophomore, i wrote a lot of spoken word poetry, and performed at places like the nuyorican poets' cafe and the inspired word open mic.

when i was a teenager, i was very interested in youth speaks as well.